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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph above presents the number of tourists who regularly
coming
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came
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 to Carribean
Island
 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen, in total people were visited
Carribean
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the Carribean
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Island
 significantly
increase
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increased
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on
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in
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 the period given. There are two types of
accomodation
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accommodation
 provided by the resort, one of them is cruise ships.
To begin
, visitors that prefer to
staying
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stay
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 on
island
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the island
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 showed stagnant in 2010 before
rise
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rising
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 steadily year on year from just under 1 to
peak
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the peak
a peak
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 of almost 1,5 in 2015.
However
, it experienced
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 decrease in 2016 before gradually
jump
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jumping
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 in 2017.
On the other hand
, there were several
tourist
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tourists
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who choose
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choose
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chose
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 to
stayeing
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staying
 on cruise ships. The line shows
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a sharply
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sharply
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sharp
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 increase in 2011 with
starting
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a starting
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pont
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point
 below 0,5 at the beginning of the year. Unfortunately, the graph rapidly
decrease
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decreased
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on
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in
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 2012 and steeply
skyrocket
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skyrocketed
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 in 2013 until the end of
period
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the period
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 with approximately 2. In total,
number
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a number
the number
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 of tourists visiting a Carribean
Island
undergo
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has undergone
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upsurge
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an upsurge
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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