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In modern life, it is no longer acceptable to use animals as food or in other products, like clothing and medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of society, various foods and medicines are made of artificial materials
instead
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 of
animals
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 as
resources
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. So, there is an opinion that it is unacceptable to use
animals
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 as food or other goods.
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, considering people's well-being and the function of artificial
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, I partly agree with
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 idea. On the one hand, the fact that the function of materials made by technology is similar to that made by
animals
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’ leather indicates that giving up
animals
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 as clothing and other uses is possible. Take a hand-made coat as an example, its ability to keep individuals warm is as effective as the capacity of the leather of
animals
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.
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, its appearance cannot be distinguished by human eyes without professional tools.
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, its price is much lower than similar
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 made by the fur of
animals
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 its simple manufacturing process.
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, it is true that clothing can be produced without using
animals
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 as raw material.
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,
animals
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 are still the first ones to be considered when making medicines because some elements which are beneficial to the health of the human body cannot be contained in
products
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 which are manufactured with other
resources
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.
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, protein is an element useful for the well-being of people.
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this
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 substance can be through cutting-edge technology, the real protein needed by body health cannot be replaced the artificial protein.
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, human-made pills are chemical substances with by-effects compared with medical drugs.
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, there is a long way to the future where
animals
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 cannot be used as medicines. In conclusion, it is undeniable that part of
products
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 can, indeed, be made and processed without any animal
resources
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, but the view that artificial goods totally replace animal
products
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 in all areas cannot be agreeable.
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,
animals
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 are still the
resources
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 used as medicine.
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