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The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates how many
internet
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users
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 from Greece, Denmark, Canada and
World
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 average over the period of 15 years from 1998 to 2013. It is clearly seen from the graph that the number of
Internet
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users
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 rocketed significantly / dramatically in 4 regions over the given period.
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, the highest data can be witnessed in Denmark and Canada. In terms of the number of
internet
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users
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 in
Greence
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Greece
,there was a moderate jump in
internet
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users
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 between 1998 and 2013 from
abount
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about
 2
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thousands
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thousand
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 to over 62
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thousands
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thousand
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. Regarding these
figure
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figures
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 for
internet
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user
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users
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 in Denmark,during the period from 1998 to 2013,there was
rapid
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a rapid
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 rise in
internet
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users
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 from 22
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thousands
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thousand
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 to 95
thousads
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thousand
.Looking at the data for Canada,from 1998 to 2013,the amount of
internet
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users
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 experienced
a
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apply
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went up quickly from 28
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thousands
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thousand
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 to 78
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thousands
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thousand
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. The number
of
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witnessed a steady climb between 1998 and 2013 from around 2
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thousands
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thousand
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 to over 35
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thousands
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thousand
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.But the data of
this
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 region is lower than other regions.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, users, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internet penetration
  • Trend
  • Growth rate
  • Increase/decrease
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant
  • Average
  • Fluctuation
  • Plateau
  • Surge
  • Spike
  • Decline
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