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Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life. How in your view individuals best learn to manage their money?

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Nowadays, as financial issues have a great impact on individuals' lives it is an essential necessity for children to learn how to handle spending
money
. In
this
 essay, I am going to present a number of effective ways for
this
 subject. First and foremost, as it is proved parents are the greatest learning resource for children. From the early years, they can observe their parents making financial decisions. Through watching them and trying to figure out the purchase criteria in some aspects including paying by cash or buying on credit they can foster their fiscal skills.
For example
,
according to
 a recent survey, kids who are exposed to a budgetary environment are perfectly capable of managing their economic lives.
Secondly
,
schools
 and educational institutions play a crucial role in teaching kids how to spend
money
 and help them to get ready for the future.
Schools
 can provide access to financial counsellors who can guide students and their families
as well as
 be informed about commercial and budgetary subjects.
Additionally
, introducing financial literacy as a mandatory subject educates them on saving, investing, budgeting, and other
money
 skills.
However
,
this
 curriculum should be age-appropriate to be efficient. As a case in point, there are many
schools
 in the UK that conduct various workshops related to
money
 management. To sum it up, considering the importance of having the ability to handle shopping and selling, educational centres
such
 as
schools
 and academies,
also
 families as a big part of children's lives have a great role in teaching them to finance stuff.
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