The charts below shows the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
going for a trip outside their country between 1985 and 1995, and the line chart indicates
Australian’s
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Australia’s
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share in
Japanese
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the Japanese
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tourist market which the data is gathered in percentage in the same period of time as the bar chart.
Overall
, the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
having a trip abroad continuously increased between 1985 to 1995.
Also
, the percentage of
Japanese
visitors in Australia has been increasing since 1985.
Nonetheless
, the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
in Australia probably decreased after 1995. The
number
of
Japanese
tourists
traveling
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abroad in 1985 was 5 million, and it gradually increased until it reached approximately 11 million in 1990. Even though
this
number
dropped slightly in 1991, it rose
up
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again in 1992. It continued going up until it reached
the
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a
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peak at around 15 million in 1995. In 1985, the percentage of
Japanese
visitor
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visitors
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in Australia started at 2 per
cent
;
then
, it rose up until reaching approximately 5 per
cent
in 1989. Even though it decreased a little to around 4.2 per
cent
in 1990, it rose up to the highest point at approximately 6.2 per
cent
. After that, it dropped to 6 per
cent
in 1995.
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