In the past, people used to go to museums to learn facts about culture and history. Nowadays people can find all this freely on the Internet so the museums are no longer important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the technological
advencement
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advancement
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age,
people
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can explore everything on the internet, including the cultural and historical
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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. Some
people
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say it is not
nesccesery
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necessary
anymore to go to
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a museam
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museam
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museums
museum
to learn about these issues.
However
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, I personally disagree with
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statement and I going to tell the reason why.
To begin
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with,
people
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can only acquire the facts from
the
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apply
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online sources but not include real
experiences
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.
On the other hand
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, the
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museam
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museum
can be designed to give you
the
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apply
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real
experiences
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with all
sensories
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, all the
experiences
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you get are touchable, hearable and
some
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in some
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case
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cases
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, you can even smell
it
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them
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.
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, you can imagine that you go to the
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museam
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museum
of history and listen to the
sound
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sounds
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like you are in the middle of the
battle field
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battlefield
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, you can smell the blood,
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and try
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to touch a real
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used weapon
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, it will be
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an unforgetable
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unforgetable
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unforgettable
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experiences
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experience
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that the internet cannot give you.
Furthermore
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, sometimes the
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museam
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museum
is not only just
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place
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a place
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, but it is the
place
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that
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where
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people
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can spend valuable time together. The
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museam
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museum
is always a suitable
place
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to build
relationship
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relationships
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between
people
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.
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, the parents can bring
your
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their
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childern
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children
to learn
the
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about the
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culture,
the
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and the
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background of
ancients
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the ancients
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on the weekend and spend time together, even the couple can go to
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kind of
place
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for the first date where they can
know
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learn
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more
each
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about each
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other interests there.
To sum up
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, the
museams
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museums
are playing
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play
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a
sinigficant
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significant
part
of
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in
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the real
experince
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experience
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and learnings
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learnings
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learning
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and the
place
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where
people
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spend time together,
Hence
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, I disagree that the
museams
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museums
are no longer
necessory
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necessary
in
this
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digital world. By the way, I would like to recommend that the
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museam
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museum
owners should always improve their
place
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to serve the new
varoius
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various
way of learning and
experiencing
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experience
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to make the experience more interesting and exciting, and for sure, the government should play an important role for supporting the development of
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museam
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museum
by funds or public policies to motivate the
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museam
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museum
to always improve themselves.
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