Many people feel that it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
A huge number of people argue that saving endangered animal species,
such
as tigers and blue whales, is a loss of money. I believe that spending money on endangered species of animals
is quite beneficial.
On the one hand, government
should definitely allocate a large part of its budget on
charities and Change preposition
to
animals
' needs. Saving endangered habitats,
means the reducing risk of dying Remove the comma
apply
ecosystem
and marine nature processes. Fix the agreement mistake
ecosystems
That is
why blue whales should be under the
UN protection, as many other Correct article usage
apply
animals
at
Add a missing verb
are at
the
risk of extinction. So, Correct article usage
apply
that is
a reason why government
should sponsor good conditions for these species in local areas.
Add an article
the government
For instance
, lots of developed countries all around the world have their own volunteer programs, which work in cooperation with the local authorities, it
Correct pronoun usage
They
helps
to put restrictions on hunting and fishing areas correctly and investigate Correct subject-verb agreement
help
animals
' essential conditions. That is
the reason why government
should finance the protection and support Add an article
the government
animals
' surviving
.
Replace the word
survival
On the other hand
, state's
money should Correct article usage
the state's
be spend
on public facilities and developing living quality. Change the verb form
be spent
Firstly
, nowadays residents mostly stay in urban areas and they can't observe the real tragedy, which is happening now in wild environment
. Fix the agreement mistake
environments
Thus
, they are shared
the common opinion, Wrong verb form
share
that is
donations on animals
are a waste of budget. Secondly
, there are lots of other issues in the world, besides
endangered wildlife. Our generation goes through the
wars, natural disasters, Correct article usage
apply
shortage
of food and water in less developed states and Fix the agreement mistake
shortages
recently
increased rate of homelessness. So, in Correct article usage
a recently
this
case, people don't really want to help animals
, because they need to save their children and themselves.
To conclude
, though I agree that the government
should allocate quite a big part of its budget to maintain a
level of endangered Correct article usage
the
animals
and avoid their number increased
, I think that urgent needs of society, like public services should be covered by Wrong verb form
increase
government
as well.Add an article
the government
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