Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In recent years, technology has been
growth
sharply in various aspects of people's life. Phones are one of the most advanced and Replace the word
growing
up-to-dated
of human's technologies, which all people access to that and they get its benefit. The Correct your spelling
up-to-date
children
's usage from
Phones is an unavoidable matter in many fields. In my view, Change preposition
of
this
development has more negative impact
than positive Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
effect
, based on two reasonsFix the agreement mistake
effects
bring in
physiological and Verb problem
:
society
effects.
It is obvious that Replace the word
societal
children
involved
Add a missing verb
are involved
many
Change preposition
in many
seriously
troubles when spending more time with Change the adverb
serious
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their phone
phone
, which Fix the agreement mistake
phones
including
lack of sleep, obesity, Replace the word
include
problem
in their school and mood swings. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
Main
effect of playing mobile Change the article
The main
does
not Verb problem
is
have
enough sleep. Verb problem
getting
Children
prefer to enjoy more excitation compare
to sleep. Wrong verb form
compared
Furthermore
, they were involving
with playing mobile Wrong verb form
involved
long
hours at night. Change preposition
for long
On the other hand
, if teenagers spend a lot of their time mentioned act, they have a few activities, as
a Correct word choice
and as
result
they suffer Add the comma(s)
result,
healthy
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health
problem
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problems
such
as obesity and vision problems. For example
, when I go to my sibling
house, I show their Change noun form
sibling's
children
being
busy to play Wrong verb form
are
smartphone
.
Another major trouble is Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
absence
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the absence
sociality
skills, Replace the word
of social
as well as
making relationship
with other people. So, we can notice that these teenagers will endure less sociality Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
relationship
. Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
While
it is possible, they have
not safe and Add a missing verb
do have
health
connections. Replace the word
healthy
Moreover
, these children
do
not able to have correct and well Change the verb
are
marriage
, Fix the agreement mistake
marriages
job
and friends. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
For example
, in
my Change preposition
on
nephew
birthday, I recalled that Change noun form
nephew's
once
of his friends sat downCorrect your spelling
one
a
corner and he did not tend to connect with Change preposition
in a
other child
. His mother said he preferred Change the wording
another child
other children
which
spending his time Correct pronoun usage
apply
with
playing phone Change preposition
apply
instead
of his friends.
In conclusion, I believe that technology
development in mobile and smartphone Replace the word
technological
area
has more negative outcomes Fix the agreement mistake
areas
compare
to positive impacts, since Wrong verb form
compared
children
, who have the
extreme use Correct article usage
apply
from
Change preposition
of
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a smartphone
the smartphone
smartphone
, must suffer physical and social difficulties.Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
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