Failure is proof that the desire wasn’t strong enough’ To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some people believe that failing means not having a
desire
that is
strong enough. I think that even though
desire
is an important key to success, there are
also
other factors that can affect individuals' success path. On the
one
hand , favourable results are often attained when individuals have a strong
desire
.
In other words
, not wishing much for something to happen can lead to failure because when people do not feel like a particular action should take place in their life, they do not attract it and,
consequently
,they do not reach success.
For example
,
one
of my friends, in the morning before a job interview felt like he did not deserve that job, and the result of not having a powerful
desire
was him not getting the job.
On the other hand
, there are
also
other factors that have a big impact on
one
's failure
such
as not putting enough effort and not staying consistent. When people do not work sufficiently for an action, they usually will not attain a positive result.
Furthermore
, without staying consistent with their work , humans end up not achieving their goals.
For instance
, if a boy wants to get into a good college, it is not sufficient for him to have a strong
desire
.He
also
needs to put in a lot of effort when he applies and to study daily. In conclusion, I believe that even though a weak
desire
can be
one
of the failure's causes, not putting in effort and not staying consistent in an action can lead someone to non-success.
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