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Some people think the government should subsidize fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Other argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #government #fruit #vegetables #food #tax
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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, the eating habits of people have changed drastically and
as a result
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, more and more individuals prefer to eat frozen or packaged
food
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. Public concern has arisen about whether the government should provide funding for healthy
food
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 like fruit and green vegetables or impose a tax on unhealthy
items
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. I tend to believe that the government should provide more financial support to nutritious
food
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items
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. To start with, it is paramount for authorities to make healthy
food
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 easily accessible to everyone to promote healthy eating habits among individuals.
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, if fruit and vegetables are of fair cost,
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 there is less chance that people will be attracted towards unhealthy
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items
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 because everyone knows health is wealth.
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, a contribution towards promoting healthy
food
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 will create a healthy and happy society.
On the other hand
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, imposing a tax on unhealthy
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 is
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 a good option to reduce the consumption of
food
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 which is harmful to the body.
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, a certain amount of tax on less nutritious
food
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 would encourage individuals to purchase nutritious
food
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 at an affordable price.
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, if a customer is going to pay the same for a packet of Maggi and one kg of fruits,
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 he will definitely go for the healthy
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 option.
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, the affordability of nutritious
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items
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 must be the primary concern of authorities to create an optimal society and an extra charge for unhealthy
food
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 will definitely be helpful in reducing the intake of less nutritious
food
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.
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