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Many manufactured food and dring products contain high level of sugar, which causes several health problems. Sugary product should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #products #level #sugar #health #product #people
Irrespective of our age, it is hard for many of us to resist the appeal of
mouth watering
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 sweet foods.
However
, scientifically it has already been proven that high
sugar
 intake can lead to different physical complications. A passive way to demotivate
people
 to purchase
such
 detrimental foods can be to increase the price.
However
, to
me
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this
 does not seem logical and in the following
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 I will give my postulates behind my
stand point
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. First of all, it is not like that
sugar
 is completely harmful
for
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 our
body
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bodies
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. In fact, our body needs
good
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 amount of
sugar
 to produce enough calories to keep us alive and active. If the expenditure for
this
 item is increased, there can be scenarios where some
people
 will not be able to afford the
minumum
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minimum
sugar
 required for the body.
Moreover
, there will be a bigger socio-economic impact on top of
this
.
Sweetmeat
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 industry is a very big industry connected with multiple other supply chains.
For example
, farming is associated with
this
 industry through milk, packaging firms
also
 have
interest
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 here. All those companies are employing thousands of
people
.
Hence
 price
hike
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hikes
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 in those items can drastically lower
the
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consumption which in
turns
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turn
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 can lead to unemployment and poverty.
On the other hand
, we
also
 need to protect
people
 from jeopardising their own health by unhealthy consumption . One way to make them aware
about
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this
 is to label sweet products about the amount of
sugar
 they contain. And that can help
people
 to measure how much they should eat.
Overall
,
Iinflating
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Inflating
 the price of products to reduce
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utilization seems counter-intuitive to me.
Instead
 of solving the root cause, which is crossing
sugar
 intake limits,
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strategy
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 can introduce unforeseen
impact
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.
That is
 why I do not agree with the proposal. Rather I suggest
to devise
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 a scheme where
people
 will have all the available information to
take
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 a conscious call
whether
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about whether
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 they should have those desserts or not.
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