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some people think that watching sports is a waste of leisure time? to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Charity has always been one of the prime concerns of
people
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 since
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 immemorial, Especially the
sports
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 activities. Many individuals argue that spending
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 watching
sports
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 activity is
waste
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a waste
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 of
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. In my opinion, there are some advantages
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 disadvantages. So, I partially agree with the statement. We are going to discuss both views in forthcoming paragraphs On the one hand, there are some advantages to watching those kinds of activities.
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, nowadays
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 are living a hectic life.
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 watching is a good leisure activity which is providing mental relief and enjoyment.
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, it is to make a nation proud when a nation wins in
sports
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. The
people
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 are responsible to encourage the team and support them.
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, youngsters should watch the telecast and they should do the activities for their mental and physical strength.
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, It has some disadvantages.
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,
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 are spending more
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 on
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. Especially the youngsters who studying and working are giving more priority to games rather than their duty.
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, they are getting addicted.
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, some
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 take leave at World Cup
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. It needs more
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 and sometimes more effort.
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,
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 like cricket need 1 whole day to finish the one-day match. It took our whole day.
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, most of the
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 football matches occur in European countries so it is at midnight in India.
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people
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 are following
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 without sleeping.
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, some
people
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 believe it is not worth watching
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 for enjoyment. I think it has both negatives and positives. So I partially agree with the statement
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