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The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
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The line graph gives information about the percentage of local and foreign people who travelled either to or from the
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 in a twenty-year duration, from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart indicates 5 countries where have been visited the most by
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residents
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 .
Overall
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, it is important to note that
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 the
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residents
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 category experienced an upward trend from 1989 onwards, the overseas category levelled off.
Also
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, France stood for the highest proportion of
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,
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this
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 number reduced remarkably in Turkey. In terms of the line graph,
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residents
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 accounted for roughly 13% ,
likewise
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, overseas
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 got about 10% in 1979.There was moderate growth from 1979 to 1984 in both categories.
However
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, local
residents
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 increased sharply to around a third in 1989,
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 The overseas category experienced a slow increase. From 1989 to 1999, the proportion of
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residents
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 grew dramatically and peaked at approximately 55% in 1999.
In contrast
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, there was a slow went up slightly.
According to
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 the bar chart, France and Spain had the highest proportion of
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, around 14 million and 13 million respectively.
On the other hand
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, Turkey and Greece included the least number of
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, approximately 3 and 4 million

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, residents, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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