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Some people think that online reading materials are better for children. Others argues that traditional paper based resources are better. Discuss and give your opinion.

#people #materials #children #paper #resources
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 the appearance of the innovation of online reading
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, the debate on whether the innovative reading
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 or the traditional
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 will bring better learning outcome attract people's attention. From my perspective,
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online reading
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 are more recommendable.
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 may argue that online reading
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 are more
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beneficial
. The reasons may come from either involvement or expense.
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online reading
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 always
intergrate
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integrate
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 and facilitate their reading.
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online reading
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 cost less than the traditional
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, which benefits those
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 from low-income families. Online reading
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 now enjoy more and more favour.
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, in Hong Kong schools, there is an increasing number of the usage of online reading
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.
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, others may vote
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 its benefit
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distract
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. Unlike the various functions on
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electronic devices,
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 can only look at the paper and use pens to take notes, which will at certain extent decrease the possibility of being distracted.
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, teachers always provide paper-and-pen reading
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online
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 for students with ADHD, who
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cannot keep attention for a long time. In conclusion, either
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materials
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 deserves its existence.
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prefer
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online reading
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due to
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 enriched content and attraction. To foster
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's reading
habbits
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habits
, it should be an engaged and practical tool.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenient
  • accessible
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • multimedia
  • portable
  • suitable
  • physical
  • tangible
  • visual
  • distracted
  • limited
  • versatile
  • screen time
  • critical thinking
  • comprehension
  • retention
  • digital literacy
  • environmentally-friendly
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