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The best ways to measure someone's success is to look at how mush money that person has. do you agree or disagree

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Many people associate
success
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 with the amount of
money
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someone
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 has in their bank account,
therefore
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, it is measured statistically that way.
In contrast
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, I think
success
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 cannot be seen only as monetary since it holds different dimensions that can be compared as well. It would be wrong to say that a person, who earned
money
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 through hard work, and
someone
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, who inherited a ton, are equally successful and should be put on the same measurement list. The same thing applies to winning a lottery, which I do not consider as
success
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. For me,
success
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 is related only to personal achievements that require time and persistence.
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, it is crucial to understand, where all the
money
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 came from, before comparing it with somebody else's positive outcomes. A person can be successful without earning a lot of
money
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.
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, having high grades in all the subjects at university can be considered academic
success
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, or having personal growth or even achieving high scores in athletics can be one as well.
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, measuring these becomes harder, since there are way more variables that are more personal, but not impossible. Grades, different norms, or criteria are great ways to compare
someone
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's performance or outcomes with others.
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,
money
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 is not the best measurement unit, when it comes to different disciplines where
money
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 is not involved.
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, it is easy to measure
success
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 with
money
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,
however
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, it's not the best possible measurement unit when it comes to performative disciplines
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 as athletics or studying.
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, the origin of
money
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someone
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 has should be examined before comparing it.
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