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The crime rate nawadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technological progress has contributed to enhancement in many aspects of life. The number of illegal actions has dropped
due to
 technology in comparison with the previous
years
. I totally agree with
this
 idea, since
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recent
years
' advancements have evolved how crimes are stopped before happening, and how criminals are found out. Novel scientific advances have immensely made
shift
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a shift
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 in preventing socially unacceptable behaviours, especially crimes. There are various setups that the new sciences have helped, including education and surveillance systems. The more educated and
literated
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literate
liberated
 a society is, the more drop in
crime
 rate happens.
This
 notion is shown,
for example
, during
1970's
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 American campaign in
crime
 prevention endeavour. The United
States'
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States
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 federal government felt that it
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 to do something about the
growning
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growing
 number of burglars or murderers. So, the government raised
the
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social awareness
,
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and
also
 invested in
contraconception
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contraception
contra conception
 means to decrease the chance of a child being raised in an ill environment. Technological advances in the past 100
years
 have evolved the ways of finding out a
crime
. Forensic studies researchers work on the means of ill behaviours, the root causes, and the most efficient ways to
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 out the truth. Take fingerprint collection, splash patterns, arson patterns, or DNA
test
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 as examples of
such
endeavour
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. 150
years
 ago none of
above
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 was available. DNA
test
,
for instance
, works in both directions. There are cases where an innocent person is being punished, and the
test
 has changed the course of
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,
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 or cases where the
test
 on a hair string has led to a criminal being brought to justice. Even, when dead bodies cannot be identified, DNA
test
 shows their identity or family relationship. In conclusion, I totally agree that the novel technology has changed
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crime
 prevention,
as well as
 finding out the
crime
 roots. As scientists, especially forensic researchers, study
this
 subject, newer ways are found. Hopefully in the future
crime
 rate will even drop lower.
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