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The crime rate nawadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technological progress has contributed to enhancement in many aspects of life. The number of illegal actions has dropped
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 technology in comparison with the previous
years
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. I totally agree with
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recent
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' advancements have evolved how crimes are stopped before happening, and how criminals are found out. Novel scientific advances have immensely made
shift
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 in preventing socially unacceptable behaviours, especially crimes. There are various setups that the new sciences have helped, including education and surveillance systems. The more educated and
literated
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literate
liberated
 a society is, the more drop in
crime
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 rate happens.
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, during
1970's
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 American campaign in
crime
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 prevention endeavour. The United
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 federal government felt that it
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 to do something about the
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growing
 number of burglars or murderers. So, the government raised
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social awareness
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and
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 invested in
contraconception
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contraception
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 means to decrease the chance of a child being raised in an ill environment. Technological advances in the past 100
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 have evolved the ways of finding out a
crime
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. Forensic studies researchers work on the means of ill behaviours, the root causes, and the most efficient ways to
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 out the truth. Take fingerprint collection, splash patterns, arson patterns, or DNA
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test
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 as examples of
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. 150
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 ago none of
above
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 was available. DNA
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,
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, works in both directions. There are cases where an innocent person is being punished, and the
test
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 has changed the course of
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,
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 or cases where the
test
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 on a hair string has led to a criminal being brought to justice. Even, when dead bodies cannot be identified, DNA
test
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 shows their identity or family relationship. In conclusion, I totally agree that the novel technology has changed
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crime
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 prevention,
as well as
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 finding out the
crime
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 roots. As scientists, especially forensic researchers, study
this
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 subject, newer ways are found. Hopefully in the future
crime
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 rate will even drop lower.
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