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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of American households
according to
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 their yearly
income
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015. The count of households is measured in millions.
Overall
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, moderate earnings
was
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were
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 relatively stable
while
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 the highest
income
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 group experienced an upward trend in the given period.
To begin
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 with,
majority
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the majority
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 of United States residents earn more than $100,000 annually. The count began at just below 30 million in 2007 and slightly decreased by less than five
millions
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million
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 in 2011.
Subsequently
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,
this
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 number grew moderately to approximately 34 million, reaching its peak in the concluding period. Looking into more
details
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, the lowest yearly salary group, with less than $25,000 per household, witnessed a mild fluctuation between 2011 to 2015. The number peaked at just below 30
millions
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million
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 in 2011.
Similarly
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,
group
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a group
the group
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 with the second
least
Correct word choice
lowest
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income
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 faced the same pattern.
On the other hand
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, the two
moderate
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moderate-income
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income
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 groups, ranging from $50,000 to $99,999
remain
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remained
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 relatively steady during the observation period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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