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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You work for a small company. You need to arrange for some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter • explain why you want to take time off work • give details of how long you will be away • suggest how you will make up for the lost time Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

#minutes #work #company #time #employer #lost #addresses #dear……………………
Dear Maam, I hope you
finds
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 well. I am writing to request
a
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time off
work
this
 coming March 1 until
march
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 3. I send via email my request. I am Austina Cruz I
am
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 working for
this
 company for half a decade. Since, when
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company started I did not take off
work
.
Fist
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 and foremost, I want to take off
work
 because I have
important
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an important
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 matter to solve. Since
,
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 my mother died my two siblings did not yet
received
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 a single penny from her pension.
As a result
, I need to follow
in
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 the office
personal
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 rather
that
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thru
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through
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 phone
call
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 and emails. I am not around just
only
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for only
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 5 days so
that
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if
what
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there
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 decision I come back to
the
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their office to make sure that it will
credidt
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credit
 the money
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to
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 the
bak
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bank
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 account of my siblings.
However
, I give time
also
 for my kids to
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.
In addition
, even if I am not around, I will
work
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thru
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online so that I
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 cope
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the
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with the
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 daily activities but I will only my laptop at night when the kids
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is
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 already asleep. Hoping
your
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 kind consideration. Yours faithfully, Austina Cruz
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