Doctors, nurses, and teachers make a great contribution to society and should be paid more than entertainment and sports celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

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workers who make a huge contribution to

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’ efforts in order to improve

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life conditions significantly.

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been affecting individuals’

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died. In order to save lives, a group of scientists and medical workers worked together.

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several studies and cooperation, a vaccine was invented and thanks to the vaccination millions of

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were saved.

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scientists and doctors are still suffering from various

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burdens, and they have not received enough attention compared to sports and entertainment

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, providing proper education to children is important to save our future. The next generation should be involved contemporary education system and

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suffer from several economic problems, too.

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have to find another job to pay their rent and other essential needs. How is it possible for them to focus on their job when they are facing financial issues?

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have a positive impact on

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health

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workers and

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are more vital for

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, providing

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care and educating the next generation, respectively. Governments and societies must ensure that these

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment, such as coursework and projects, is not a satisfactory way to do this. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?