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The bar chart provides information about various
age
groups
people
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expenditure in the UK
manily
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mainly
three categories namely
Food
and
drink
,
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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and Hotel and Entertainment in 2004. To give an overview, it was observed that
food
and
drink
expenditure consumption showed
a
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upwardtrend
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upward trend
throughout the whole period. Even though, restaurant and hotel preferred
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choices
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depicted a downtrend till
fourth
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age
group. To commence with, began with
Food
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and
drink
category, it was observed that under
the
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30 citizens preferred
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least contribution and after
that
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it escalated more than twice as compared to the under 30.
Moreover
, elderly
people
like most of
this
food
and
drink
at the
age
of 76+.
However
, individuals who like to eat in
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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and Hotel percentage embarked
at
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14% and it
continoulsy
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continuously
continually
dropped till
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of 46-60.
Nevertheless
, it
remarkbly
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remarkably
notice
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that
food
and
drink
consumption percentage declined the
age
group of 61-75.
While
,
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older
people
like to eat in
reasturant
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restaurants
restaurant
around 7%. Moving forward in Entertainment,
under
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the
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30 years citizens showed less interest in
this
whereas
young
people
like
to
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entertainment more as compared to other
age
groups.
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