The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in 2013, and also the amount (in tonnes) of fertilisers used. The second graph shows the volume of rainfall in each month (in millimetres).

The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in 2013, and also the amount (in tonnes) of fertilisers used. The second graph shows the volume of rainfall in each month (in millimetres).
The charts give information regarding the tonnage of fruit produced
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the
fertiliser
used by a farm per month in 2013, and monthly rainfall in that year.
Overall
, all the graphs experienced marked fluctuations in 2013. It is notable that the seasonal pattern of using
fertiliser
is largely reversed in comparison with that of the produced fruit. There is a significant increase in the tonnage of fruit from just over 2 to nearly 4.2 between January and August, followed by a dramatic decrease to about the initial 2 in the subsequent months. From January to March, the figure for using
fertiliser
increased by approximately 0.5
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In contrast
to the former graph, the tonnes of
fertiliser
used dripped markedly over the next 7 months, after which it increased to just under 0.5. Meanwhile, the amount of rainfall represented a similar trend to that of using
fertiliser
with an early high of 16mm in February. It fell constantly
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12mm to July and stood at 4mm for the next 2 months. From October onwards, it rose from well over 10mm to a peak of 14mm.
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