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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Over recent years, more and more
people
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 have been attending
university
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 and have persisted as to whether
students
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 should pay for
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 privilege or not.
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 there are convincing arguments on both sides, I strongly agree that it should be free for everyone. One argument forward is high-quality education is becoming more expensive to fund as universities grow in size.
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, many learners who want to enrol in
university
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, can not which is why they have financial issues,
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 as a lack of budget.
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, the majority of those
students
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 have attended since the middle of classes.
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, the high
university
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 fees affect many
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's education,
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 a shortage of
people
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 to do manual jobs
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 as plumbing and carpentry, so making the
university
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 more expensive may encourage
people
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 to take up these jobs.
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, if many countries would have free education for everyone, there would be a lot of benefits in society.
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, in Germany , the government has resolved that all high educational systems are free for domestic
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 without income.
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 means that the government encourages the young generation and gives a lot of opportunities for gaining the best quality of knowledge.
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, there is the issue of equality of opportunity. If all
students
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 are required to pay, those on a low income may be dissuaded from attending,
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 making it unfair. The reason for
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 is that they will likely not be able to secure financial support from their family so they will be concerned about the debts they will incur in the future. In conclusion, all universities should be free which is no payment, I believe that everybody should be well-educated and have a professional workforce in the future.
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relevant specific examples
Consider diversifying your examples and adding more real-life scenarios to enhance the strength of your arguments.
clear comprehensive ideas
Be mindful of grammar and phrasing to ensure clarity. For instance, the phrase 'persisted as to whether students should pay for this privilege or not' could be more succinct.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively outlines the debate and clearly states your position.
complete response
You’ve provided strong arguments both for and against the topic, indicating a balanced approach before reinforcing your stance.
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