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Some people say that government should pay for health care and education, while others say this is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today’s society, the role of
government
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 in providing health care and
education
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 is a subject of debate. Some argue that the authority should be responsible for funding these essential
services
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,
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 others believe that it is not within the
government
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’s purview. In my opinion, residents should bear part of the expenses, and the
government
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 should
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 establish social security and special funding to support research institutes and those who need financial support. On the one hand, there are some reasons why people advocate the state’s provision of health care and
education
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.
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, because taxes provide most of the
government
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’s revenue, medical treatment and schooling should be provided for its citizens in return. By covering those costs, the authority could
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 guarantee that every resident is given fundamental rights, contributing to alleviating unfairness and the imbalance of rewards.
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, national funding for the latest medical research and teaching methodology development plays a crucial role in achieving breakthroughs in fatal disease curing and
all-round
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education
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 development because private companies and individuals are less likely to invest in charities if no sufficient profits can be generated.
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, it is reasonable that the costs of health care and educational
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 should be covered by citizens. Suppose the
government
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 appropriates more budgets for medical and educational facilities; in that case, a financial burden on the national economy may be caused, and over-exploitation of state incentives results in annoying economic crises for the whole society.
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, when residents are required to pay their shares of the cost, they would become more responsible for utilizing those
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, especially medical recourse.
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, paying for medical charges could encourage people to spontaneously avoid overdiagnosis and overtreatment which may lead to harmful side effects in healthcare. In conclusion,
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is argue
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 that the
government
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 should allocate funds for public
services
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, including healthcare and
education
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, those expenses should be the responsibility of citizens and the state.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly introduces the topic and states your opinion. Your opinion is not clearly stated in the introduction.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples to enhance the clarity and thoroughness of your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • access
  • basic services
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • public health
  • well-being
  • human capital
  • economic development
  • individual responsibility
  • educational attainment
  • taxpayers
  • inefficiency
  • lack of choice
  • private sector
  • quality
  • innovation
  • accessible
  • affordable
  • role
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