The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offense (crime). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features. and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the number of people arrested divided by
genders
and type of crime. Fix the agreement mistake
gender
Overall
, it can be seen that Violence against the
person has the highest percentage among all Correct article usage
a
groups
.
The top 2 proportions are Violence against the person representing around 33% for females and about 31% for males and Theft and handling stolen goods has about 31% and near
20% respectively.
Change the word
nearly
Next,
the groups
that stand above 5% are Other offenses
with 13% for women and almost 15% for men. The following group is Criminal damage: 7% for females and 10% for the other. Change the spelling
offences
Then
, the
Drug Correct article usage
apply
and
Correct word choice
apply
offenses
Change the spelling
offences
is
slightly above 5% for women and about 7.5% for men.
Change the verb form
are
Lastly
, the groups
that have very small numbers. First,
Burglary has about 3% for
females Change preposition
of
while
the opposite has about 7% proportion. Then
, the next 2 groups
are Robbery and Fraud and forgery which are below 5% for both genders.Submitted by erniwbs on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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