The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offense (crime). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features. and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offense (crime). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features. and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the number of people arrested divided by
genders
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and type of crime.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Violence against
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person has the highest percentage among all
groups
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. The top 2 proportions are Violence against the person representing around 33% for females and about 31% for males and Theft and handling stolen goods has about 31% and
near
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20% respectively.
Next,
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the
groups
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that stand above 5% are Other
offenses
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offences
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with 13% for women and almost 15% for men. The following group is Criminal damage: 7% for females and 10% for the other.
Then
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,
the
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apply
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Drug
and
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offenses
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offences
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is
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are
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slightly above 5% for women and about 7.5% for men.
Lastly
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, the
groups
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that have very small numbers.
First,
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Burglary has about 3%
for
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females
while
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the opposite has about 7% proportion.
Then
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, the next 2
groups
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are Robbery and Fraud and forgery which are below 5% for both genders.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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