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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of three kinds of
crime
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 (
burglary
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, car theft and robbery) which was committed in Manchester city over 9
years
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 from 2003 to 2012.
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, there was a significant drop in the
number
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 of
burglary
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 cases, whilst robbing and car stealing figures were fairly steady over the given period. At the start
years
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,
burglary
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 was the most popular
crime
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, which was replaced by car theft from 2007 to 2012. With regards to the amount of
burglary
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 committed, it began at about 3400 and peaked at over or less 3700 in 2004 before falling dramatically to the bottom at just over 1000 in 2008. In the remained
years
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, the
number
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 of
burglary
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 cases went off its 2008 bottom, remaining steady at nearly 1500.
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, the
number
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 of cars stolen started at approximately 2300 as the second
popular
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crime
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.
This
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 figure, which reached a bottom of just 2000 three
years
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 later, rose back slightly in the final
years
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 to about 2800 in 2012, remaining the most popular
crime
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. Meanwhile, over 600 robbery cases were committed in the first year, after which the
number
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 peaked at about 900 and
then
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 fell back and remained stable at around 600 from 2006 to the end year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, burglary, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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