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The graph below shows the number of tourists of visiting a particular Carribean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists of visiting a particular Carribean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph compares the
number
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 of people who visited a specific
Carribean
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Caribbean
Island
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along with
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 the type of their accommodations over a period of 7
years
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.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 had a significant increase during these
years
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.
Also
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, the
amount
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number
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 of tourists who stayed on both cruise ships and
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the island
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island
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islands
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 experienced an increasing trend from 2010 to 2017. In 2010, the initial
number
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 of
visitors
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 who spent their time on
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island
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the island
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 was about half a million larger than that
of
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apply
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stayed on cruise ships ( 750,000 and 250,000 people respectively). From 2010 to 2015 the
number
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 of
island
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 residents was larger than cruise
ships
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ship
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 residents,
while
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 in the
last
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 two
years
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 of the period, their positions changed and reached a peak at 1.5
millions
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million
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 and 2
millions
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million
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 respectively. The total
number
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 of tourists had the lowest amount in 2010 ( 1
miliion
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million
visitors
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) and had a steady rise for 5
years
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. After that, it
remaind
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remained
remains
 static until 2016.
Then
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 it reached its highest amount in 2017 (3.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, years, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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