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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season.Some people consider it is a good idea,but some people oppose it.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many individuals believe that the increasing use of
aircraft
 to transport fruits and vegetables to nations where
such
plants
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plant
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plants
 hardly develop or are out of season. Others think that it is unnecessary and waste.
This
writer'opinion
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opinion
 is the former idea and the reasons will be outlined in
this
 essay. On the one hand, difficult agriculture of
countries
 can depend on products were imported.They can do
a
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apply
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research and develop
plants
 effectively.
Moreover
, residents will have enough food and do not worry about
lack
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a lack
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 of fruits and vegetables.
In addition
,it
also
 can export other goods to
neighbour
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 nations. It can
adobt
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adopt
requirements
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the requirements
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 of people all over the world.
On the other hand
, if
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 of
aircraft
 decreased, it
could
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would
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 not be
waste
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a waste
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money
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.Because of expensive fees,some
countries
 will invest in other areas
where
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 have good conditions for agriculture.
Furthermore
, these
countries
 can rely on the neighbourhood and do not on development's own. They will make the
plants
 will be worse.
Therefore
, they need to be
independable
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independent
 and focus on studying
structure
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 of beans or weather and land conditions. In my opinion, using
of
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aircraft
 brings a lot of benefits. It can help areas
where
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that
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 have hard conditions for planting and harvest.What is more, it
also
rises
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raises
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relationship
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relationships
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 between
countries
 in the world. In terms of finance, it
also
 contributes to
profit
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the profit
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 and income of abroad
business
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businesses
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. In conclusion, in order to assist poorer nations, people should use
aircraft
 so that transport goods of agriculture to them.
Therefore
, I think the former idea is the best choice
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