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You have recently moved to a different location where you experience frequent electricity breakdown. Write a letter to the electricity board. In your letter, -describe the situation, -tell what problems you are facing due to this, -explain what you want the board to do

#location #electricity #breakdown #board #-describe #situation #-tell #-explain
Dear Sir/Maam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to complain about the
electricity
 breakdown in
this
 villa. I am Austina Koo I just moved here 3 days ago.
In
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 my first day here the
electricity
 was good but
in
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 the second
day
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 it started to turn on and off.
Furthermore
, I never mind that kind of situation because after a
minutes
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 it will back to
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continuous
 lightning until today morning. Unfortunately, my work is affected
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this
 kind of situation because I am working from home all of my
pendings
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pending
spending
 will be sent tomorrow morning.
Moreovere
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Moreover
, I
lost
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 my job if
this
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these
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 pending reports
will
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 not
send
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. In
a
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addition, the water for
this
 villa is using
an
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electricity
, so the water tank is already empty.
To conclude
, I need to request
to
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you to
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 check the
electricity
 in the whole village so that you
will
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 figure out the cost of
this
 blockout.
Furtermore
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Furthermore
,
this
take
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 immediate action. Yours faithfully, Austin K
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