In many countries in the world people buy cloths and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Fashion

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not only

make

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people

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feel calm and

relax

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but it

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help

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them become confident in

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present era. It is thought that purchasing outfits

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altering the way of

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hair style

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hairstyle

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according to

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the

fashion

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has become a recent

trend

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, and I think, it is

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apply

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beneficial for

the

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apply

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people

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as a form of self-expression,

way

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to boost self-confidence

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a path to earn

money

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with,

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change is happening in our societies because

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film

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the film

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industries

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industry

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influence

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youngsters to involve

theirselves

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themselves

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to earn

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finance by entertaining

people

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with the latest

fathion

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fashion

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, actors have to wear different fashionable

dressess

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dresses

and make good

hair

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to look amazing on the set as they are

casted

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internationally.

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people

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follow them on

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social sites and they are

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willing to look

perfect

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like them,

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, they opt to follow

latest

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trend

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and really want to boost their confidence as they notice on

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television.

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fashion

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gain

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popularity among the new generation.

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this

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trend

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has been positive for

present

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nation as it has become a source of earning

money

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, many

people

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are working hard to become a part of the film industry and they wear fashionable clothes

and

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apply

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change their

hair

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color and style with the latest

trend

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and act on

the

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social media to impress the directors.

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, when they get selected they have to live with proper dress up as they are always in front of the cameras.

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latest

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the latest

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clothing and

hairstle

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hairstyle

hairstyles

assist them to become more

confidence

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everyday's

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life.

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, clothing sellers

also

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get advantages by selling expensive latest

fashion

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clothes and

make

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making

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apply

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huge amounts of

money

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, different

stle

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styles

of clothing and

hair

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have become popular

due to

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number

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the number

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of benefits of it and many

people

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are taking

advantages

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advantage

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them

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by making a lot of

money

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

latest fashion trends
express individuality
personal style
fashion industry
media
promote
influence
consumer choices
fit in
socially accepted
self-expression
boost self-confidence
celebrities
influencers
social media
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In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Some pp believe that public buildings should be moved out ò the city to promote citizen's well being and better economic growing, while some argue that the planning will cause more harm than good. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern era, it is easy to sell, buy and work with others through the internet. But others are against it. Do you think this is a positive trend or a negative trend?