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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart depicts how much carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions
that
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apply
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were produced by a person in the UK,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007; measured in metric tonnes. By and large, in the first decade, all countries except
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the united
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united
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United
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Kingdom
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 showed an increasing trend. Meanwhile, in the three four decades,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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 managed to cut off
pollutions
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pollution
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,
while
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 the opposite trend occurred in both Italy and Portugal.
To begin
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 with, all listed countries started
in
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at
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 different levels. in 1967, Portugal was the lowest at
bellow
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below
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 2, followed by Italy,
Sweden
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, and United
Kingdom
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 at slightly above 4, 8, and 10 respectively. In the following 10 years, all the numbers increased at least by one for each country
expect
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except
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 for the UK
that
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which
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 remained stable. Meanwhile,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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 emissions production were about the same at around 11. The number dropped significantly to 9 for the UK and 5 for
Sweden
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 in 2017.
In
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On
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contrary
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the contrary
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,
Italy
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Italy's
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Co2
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CO2
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 emission peaked at almost 8 in 2007 from 6 in 1877.
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, Portugal was at around 2 in the first ten years and peaked
to
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at
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 5
at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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