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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
 believe that it is a great concept to increase
aircraft
 to deliver fruit and vegetables to some nations in which
such
 greenery hardly grows or is beyond the season,
while
 some
people
 have an objection to it. From my perspective, I completely agree to increase
aircraft
 for transporting for several reasons and
this
 essay is going to negotiate about these aspects. The airliner is one of the main transportation of in every country particularly in the developed country so it has plenty of advantages. The first and foremost factor is that it can help some nations that have difficulty growing plants
due to
 extreme conditions
such
 as drought, high temperatures and the the soil type and they just rely on importing vegetables from other countries.
For instance
, Vietnam tend to not grow a type of fruit which is known as cherry because of the weather condition so they have to depend on importing fruit from Europe.
Besides
 that, it can aid in warming up the relationship of each nation together.
As a result
, by taking public transport rather than driving,
people
 are able to limit the principal emissions from vehicles that lead to global warming.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons which contribute to the pollution of the environment. First of all,
aircraft
requires
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 tonnes of fuel like coal, oil, and gas to activate the engines which is a fundamental factor that leads to air pollution.
Thus
,
people
 rejected
airliner
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airliners
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 as a means of transport regardless of
its
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 favourable attributes.
For instance
, some researchers discovered that the amount of CO2 has been increasing these years
due to
 the gas
fume
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 from
aircraft
 which causes the pollution and greenhouse effect. In my opinion, the government should make a regulation to control the proportion of
aircraft
 in order to not let the percentage of CO2 increase.
Furthermore
, using
aircraft
 for transport can enhance the relationship
also
 the income of that country
due to
 the exchange. In general,
although
 airlines provide good transportation, does not mean that they should be overused.
Otherwise
, the world will have to face more serious environmental problems in the next decade leading to much more significant consequences.
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