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Students at schools and the university learn far more from lessons with the teachers than from other source (such as internet and television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion asserting that
teachers
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 can play a more vital role in teaching
students
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 in educational institutions rather than other sources through the Internet or television.
While
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 either internet-based or TV-based
courses
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 can be beneficial in some cases, I am of the opinion that  face-to-face contact enables
students
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 to resolve educational issues.   The main advantage of both online
courses
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 and
courses
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 shown on TV is that
students
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 can attend these
courses
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 wherever they want.
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 is because if
students
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 reside in areas far away from educational systems, they may have to move a long distance to reach schools or universities, which may result in a time-consuming activity. Ergo,
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courses
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 may be able to create  a pedagogical environment in their inhabitants without transportation.
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, in Vietnam, after
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 in the countryside utilized online classes, the studies indicated a drastic increase in the number of graduated
students
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.   Notwithstanding, it is undeniable that a close relationship with
teachers
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 can associated with several benefits.
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, with close contact with
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,
students
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 can ask questions from
teachers
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 during classes to solve their uncertainties, followed by a better understanding of subjects.
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, as
teachers
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 can set homework and quizzes, they can assess the performance of
students
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 effectively,
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 monitoring their progress.
In addition
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, when educators present high weaknesses during
courses
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,
teachers
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 are likely to alter their teaching methods, leading to the improvement of the learning process.   In conclusion, even though long-distance learning via the Internet and television may be advantageous to some deprived
students
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, indisputably, productive teaching techniques will be achieved by a close connection because not only do
students
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 overcome difficulties with the aid of
teachers
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 but
also
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teachers
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 improve their methods with the aids of
students
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' feedback.
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Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and provide a clear conclusion at the end of the essay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pedagogy
  • Motivation
  • Interactive learning
  • Curriculum-based
  • Passive consumption
  • Digital literacy
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving
  • Feedback mechanism
  • Misinformation
  • Biases
  • Technological advancements
  • Educational methodologies
  • Guidance
  • Structured learning
  • Reliable sources
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