IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Your local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to help with environment projects in your area. Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help. In your letter -describe a local environmental issue that affects you. -explain what you would like to do to help. -and suggest how the problem could be avoided in future.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 email to you as I am interested in supporting the environmental projects that Dalian People Newspaper wrote in yesterday’s newspaper. I am a permanent resident living in
Heping
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 Square Area. There is a serious rubbish issue in my area since it is a transport centre of many bus routes, and some passengers throw litter in public places.
As a result
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, the living environment in my area is messy and disgusting.
Therefore
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, I would like to contribute my effort to protect the surroundings in my place. I am keen to join the volunteer group which alerts passengers not to throw rubbish in public.
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, I strongly recommend that the government should put some advocation paper in public that educates people to protect the public environment. I hope that I can provide my help to protect the environment. I am looking forward to your response to my application. Thanks, and Regards Jade

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Provide more specific details about the rubbish issue in your area to make it more convincing.
Clearly state what kind of help you are offering instead of just mentioning joining a volunteer group.
Expand on your suggestion for the government to put advocation papers in public places to educate people.
Improve the greeting and closing to be more formal and appropriate for a business letter.
Break the letter into paragraphs to improve coherence and readability.
Provide a clear conclusion to wrap up the letter.
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