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The two pie charts show the average spending by households in a country at two different points in its economic development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show the average spending by households in a country at two different points in its economic development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts display the expenditure of households in one nation
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 there was an improvement in its economy from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
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,it is evident from the diagrams that over the years,there was a shift as the amounts spent on food reduced drastically and more money was
alloted
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allocated
allotted
allowed
 to recreation and other items.
To begin
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 with,In 1920,households bought
Foods
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Food
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 at 71.9% hitting the peak.But,there was a sharp fall to 21.8% by 2000.
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,a significant increase was observed in recreation and travelling as it stood at 34.2% and 14.3% respectively by 2000.
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,Little amounts went to Housing,Clothing,Education,
Medical
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and Medical
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 care in 1920, it rose steadily over the years.
In Contrast
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,A minority of the
spendings
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spending
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 were for fuel and household goods at the beginning of the period. Still,it fell slightly to 6.3% and 3.1% by 2000.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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