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Topic: Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
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 contend that teachers should not ask schoolchildren to do
homework
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while
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 others assert that
homework
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 is one of the most necessary and critical requirements of teaching and learning.
Although
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homework
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 has a key role to play in education, I personally believe that
children
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 do not need to have too much
homework
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.
Homework
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 is a necessary and important aspect of education for
children
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. Because
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 the main advantage is that it can help the kids review the lessons in the class.
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 can lead to that the pupil can remember knowledge deeply. Take the English subject as an example, the vocabulary and grammar of
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 subject are very difficult to memorize.
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, if the students do not study themselves at home and the teachers
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 do not give
homework
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, the
children
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 will forget all the knowledge that they learned at school.
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, there are several reasons why
people
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 argue that
homework
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 is really unnecessary. First of all, many
people
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 think that kids just need to study at school and when coming home, they should rest and relax.
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, they can make their hobby,
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 as reading books, playing football, talking with their family,… It is a great way to reduce stress and unwind effectively.
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, the pupil should learn the other special subjects
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 preferences
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 of doing
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such
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 as playing the piano, baking, drawing or studying some sport to improve health.
This
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 can lead to comprehensive development for the kids.
Besides
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, the young should spend their free time taking part in social activities or clubs.
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, when participating
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 club, the
children
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 not only can improve their knowledge but
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 may learn various skills
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 as teamwork skills, independent-thinking skills and meeting different
people
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. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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homework
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 is one of the methods of education but it is not the only way. I believe that entertainment, relaxation and making good habits after school are
also
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 great ways to improve and develop yourself.
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task response
Provide a more balanced argument by presenting counterarguments and addressing them.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the essay more coherently by following a clear and logical structure.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary by using more varied and precise terms.
grammatical range
Improve your sentence structure and grammar by avoiding errors and using more advanced sentence patterns.
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