The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car

The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car
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The presented pie charts exhibit the background of why wokers prefer cycling and driving to get their offices respectivelly.
Overall
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, the group of people who ride a bicycle for journey to workplace tend to choose the way for merits which are derived from cycling, not for pros of riding a bicycle itself.
On the contrary
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, the reason why people drive vehicles is
due to
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the merit of driving itself,
hence
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the most dominant reason is related to how it feels to drive to get workplace. Regarding cycling, people prefer cycling because of health and fitness
as well as
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the environment most: the both rates are 30%,
hence
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the healthy and environmentally friendly reasons filled over a half of the chart by 10%. When it comes to driving, most of workers find it is comfortable to get offices by vehicle: the proportion of the background is filled 40%, which is almost double of the reason placed the second position distance to work as 21%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "hence".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • sustainable
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • carbon footprint
  • fuel expenses
  • parking availability
  • gridlock
  • mass transit
  • individual choice
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