The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car

The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car
The presented pie charts exhibit the background of why wokers prefer cycling and driving to get their offices respectivelly.
Overall
, the group of people who ride a bicycle for journey to workplace tend to choose the way for merits which are derived from cycling, not for pros of riding a bicycle itself.
On the contrary
, the reason why people drive vehicles is
due to
the merit of driving itself,
hence
the most dominant reason is related to how it feels to drive to get workplace. Regarding cycling, people prefer cycling because of health and fitness
as well as
the environment most: the both rates are 30%,
hence
the healthy and environmentally friendly reasons filled over a half of the chart by 10%. When it comes to driving, most of workers find it is comfortable to get offices by vehicle: the proportion of the background is filled 40%, which is almost double of the reason placed the second position distance to work as 21%.
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