Due to the development and fast exapansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small business are unable to compete. Some people believe that the of small business will bring about the death of the local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries , developed countries to be specific ,

supermarkets

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are developing and

rapily exapanding

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rapidly expanding

leaving small

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business

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businesses

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with less potential to compete. A number of people have an assumption that local

communities

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will not exit if small

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business

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businesses

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are not actively operating. I disagree with the idea that

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is the end of them. It is without doubt that large

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business

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businesses

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such

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supermarkets

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are expanding fast in several nations, and there are few benefits as to why they should substitute small

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business

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businesses

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. One of the main reason is that

supermarkets

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can create employment opportunities

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for

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individuals that

lives

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live

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in these

communities

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result

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a result

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the local

communities

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will continue to grow.

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Supermarkets

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employee

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employ

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more people

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apply

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work in different

department

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departments

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in their stores

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as cashiers, cooks ,

drivers

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and drivers

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, just to

metion

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mention

a few.

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supermarket

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supermarkets

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offer convenience and variety to consumers since they get products from different

manufactures

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manufacturers

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and will be able to compare the prices before

buy

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buying

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unlike buying

fom

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from

the

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small

business

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bigger companies are more powerful in many

way

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ways

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, local

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business

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businesses

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can still find a way to survive and the future of the local

communities

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can not be determined by them.

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with, there are some advantages for local

business

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that can not

be replace

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for instance

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, the relationship the owner of a small

business

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have and the customers, their interaction

develop

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develops

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into

friendship

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a friendship

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that can't be

replace

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replaced

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which will make the customers always come back to support the

business

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due to

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the

relatioship

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relationship

they share.

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, the culture of local

communities

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is not just about commercial activities, is

the

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about the

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value of supporting each other when in need.

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, it would just be another market. In conclusion ,

supermarkets

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contribute to the

declined

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decline

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of small

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business

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businesses

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but the effect of

supermarkets

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on local

communities

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can be mitigated and the

sprit

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spirit

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of local

communities

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can still thrive.

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