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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school,replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments.wHAT İS YOUR OPINİON ABOUT THİS?

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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop
computers
 for students to
use
 in
school
,replacing
books
 and other printed materials like exams and assignments. Nowadays, students provide tablets and
computers
 during the lessons, some people claim that students should
use
books
 and other printed materials ;
however
, some people believe that they ought to
use
computers
 in their lessons. In
this
essay
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 both pros and cons will be discussed. To kick things off, I deem that robotically devices and
computers
 have demonstrated a great deal of success and improvement over the years: they provide us significant opportunities in our
school
 lives.
For instance
 ;
while
 I can complete some job within 8 hours one computer can do
it
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the same job within 8 seconds.
Furthermore
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 they will improve
us
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our writing, reading,
skills
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and skills
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 too. Even though, there are some cons too, ıo
dı
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do
 not think
computers
 will be more beneficial than
books
 . Especially ; in
the
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education.
For instance
, you may have an internet problem,
that
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which
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 means that you will not be able to keep track of your classes or you can get easily distracted.
In addition
 to
this
, when
school
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schools
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use
computers
instead
 of
books
,
children’s
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children
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 become more and more addicted
on
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to
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 the internet or
computers
 so they cannot even socialize In conclusion, I
will
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apply
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agree that during
school
 years we should
use
computers
 as much as necessary
cause
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because
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 we don’t want to be
an
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apply
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addict
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addicted
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in
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to
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 and
computerIf
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computers
 we should
use
 them we must
use
 them pretty
enough
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well
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.
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