The graph below shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1960 and 2000

The graph below shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1960 and 2000
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A glance at a line graph provided reveals the amount of squandering
money
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on five distinct categories in Europe, measured in
percent
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, from 1960 to 2000.
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, there was a recessive growth pattern witnessed in all data except for the clothing
money
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spending. In terms of food, being the main factor used the most
money
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with approximately 33 in 1960, that on food decreased relentlessly and drastically by 20 in the final year. With regard to spending on leisure, commencing from exactly 20 in 1960, it experienced a consistent and gradual deterioration to nearly 13
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, which had the same ending point as the amount of
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spent on food. With respect to the volume of
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splurging on clothes and transport,
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they had a similar starting point at around 10 in 1960, they had completely different trends. When the former observed a steady hike by 5 in a subsequent 40-year period, which was the only expenditure that increased over the period, the latter fell to only half
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end. As for energy, from 5 among the amount of
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used on energy, the figure underwent a tailing off to negligibly 0 in 2000, which was the lowest point compared to the other types.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Healthcare
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Life expectancy
  • Medical technology
  • Government spending
  • Population health
  • Access to medical care
  • Healthcare policies
  • Economic climate
  • Inflation rates
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Public health
  • Quality of care
  • Preventive medicine
  • Chronic diseases
  • Healthcare infrastructure
  • Universal health coverage
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