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The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how much money in US
dollars
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 was earned via careers based on language in five different regions during a year. in general,
it is clear that
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 almost in all the mentioned regions interpreters are wealthier in comparison with two other groups.
Also
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,
while
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 the average payment for languages-related jobs in Toronto is placed in the first rank, Mexicans are paid a great deal less than others for these kinds of jobs. focusing
firstly
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 on Munich and Toronto, the average income in Toronto is nearly 500,000
dollars
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 greater than the Munichian’s average gains and in both of them interpreters are a bit more affluent;
also
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 translators and language teachers are roughly the same with an annual salary fluctuating around 600,00
dollars
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. It is worth mentioning though, that in Paris and Dubai with a minor difference, interpreters are financed approximately identically.
furthermore
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, the former gives more payment to its translators, the latter is
an
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 better grade in
case
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the case
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 of
wages
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the wages
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 of teachers. The
last
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 and th e least place is rewarded to Mexico
due to
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 its lowest payment to all the mentioned groups; which is less than 200,000
dollars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • languages-related jobs
  • US dollars
  • five cities
  • highest income
  • lowest income
  • average income
  • significantly higher
  • second highest
  • one-fourth
  • gradual increase
  • variations
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