Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivls;during festival periods,people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Western culture has impacted many people and because of that several people failed to remember the meaning of religious festivals and
traditions
and they now only focus on themselves.
Therefore
, I completely agree with the statement and I will provide my opinion
further
in
this
essay. The
traditions
are the main
roots
of our religious festivals as they keep us connected with our
roots
and our souls. As an increasing
western
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culture all over the world, some may forget their core values and
traditions
leading to making them selfish.
For example
, in India, living with men without marriage is not allowed
however
, because of the
western
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side of the world, the public has started living in India as well and
this
is over and beyond what our
roots
are.
On the other hand
, through social media or television, the east side of the world got to know about how
western
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used to live alone and make appointments to meet their parents. Non-western picked up
this
habit and they don't realize
this
habit is making them lonely.
Moreover
, they started enjoying everything alone by themselves leading to not taking care of people around them or not paying attention to parents.
For instance
, one author wrote in his book that over half of the
western
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population suffers from loneliness, depression, and insomnia.
To conclude
, enjoying ourselves is great until you start forging your religious festivals or
traditions
. Staying connected with religion makes you calmer and
focused
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and
also
keeps you tied to your
roots
.
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