Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivls;during festival periods,people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Western culture has impacted many people and because of that several people failed to remember the meaning of religious festivals and

traditions

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and they now only focus on themselves.

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, I completely agree with the statement and I will provide my opinion

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this

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essay. The

traditions

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are the main

roots

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of our religious festivals as they keep us connected with our

roots

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and our souls. As an increasing

western

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culture all over the world, some may forget their core values and

traditions

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leading to making them selfish.

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, in India, living with men without marriage is not allowed

however

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, because of the

western

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side of the world, the public has started living in India as well and

this

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is over and beyond what our

roots

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are.

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, through social media or television, the east side of the world got to know about how

western

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westerners

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used to live alone and make appointments to meet their parents. Non-western picked up

this

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habit and they don't realize

this

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habit is making them lonely.

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, they started enjoying everything alone by themselves leading to not taking care of people around them or not paying attention to parents.

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, one author wrote in his book that over half of the

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population suffers from loneliness, depression, and insomnia.

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, enjoying ourselves is great until you start forging your religious festivals or

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. Staying connected with religion makes you calmer and

focused

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and

also

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keeps you tied to your

roots

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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