Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion?

Some people claim that the death sentence should be considered for cruel crimes.
However
, others express that the execution is against the values of modern society. In
this
essay, I will discuss the benefits and withdrawal of
this
punishment and give my personal opinion on
this
matter. Nowadays many nations believe that they are untouchable and very often break the rules.
Nevertheless
, in many cases, the problem with breaking the law is rooted in a person's history. Folks who commit many crimes and end up in prison usually have more than 6 traumas.
For instance
, in the famous movie 'The Wisdom of Trauma', it has been shown that criminals carry very big emotional language from their past and were previously victims of violence. These people are broken, lost souls, because they experienced many traumas in life. They need psychotherapy and medical care.
On the other hand
, it is very difficult to talk about human rights when
for example
the victim of the violence was a child and was killed in a very cruel way. In
this
situation following the death sentence seems more than acceptable. Eliminating the person from society might be the best possible solution at first because it can ensure us that
this
criminal will never again harm anyone. Accepting execution might be a warning sign for those who display criminal tendencies
as a result
society might be more concerned before abuse takes place.
To sum up
,
although
capital retribution has some disadvantages, I think that it proves to be the best way of controlling criminals, lessening governmental expenses, and preventing other people from committing crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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