Some people think it is good to raise children in a city. Others argue that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Many people claim the beneficial sides of
upbringing
Verb problem
raising
children
in a Use synonyms
city
are much better than growing up in cityside. There are both strong arguments and I strongly believe growing up in Use synonyms
Use synonyms
city
centre can be better for their future life. Correct article usage
the city
This
essay will discuss both opinions.
first of all, in Linking Words
rual
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rural
areas
, they do not have very facilities Use synonyms
Use synonyms
city
centre has. It is undeniable that in rural Correct article usage
the city
areas
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improvment
is Correct your spelling
improvement
slow
process than Correct word choice
a slower
urban
Change preposition
in urban
areas
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Linking Words
that
is why Correct pronoun usage
which
children
living in rural Use synonyms
areas
often don’t get the same amount of access. Use synonyms
For example
, you can find more schools, universities, shopping Linking Words
centers
and many Change the spelling
centres
others
places like Correct quantifier usage
other
this
in Linking Words
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city
Add an article
the city
center
. Change the spelling
centre
however
, in rural Linking Words
areas
number of them Use synonyms
are
limited and Correct subject-verb agreement
is
as a
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result
it leads to limited experience and education. Add a comma
result,
That is
why Linking Words
difference
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the difference
is seem
very Change the verb form
seems
clearly
.
Change the word
clear
secondly
, Linking Words
grow
up in urban Wrong verb form
growing
areas
can make it easier to access all Use synonyms
kind
of things like Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
halthcare
, to study in well-known schools or universities and so on. Correct your spelling
healthcare
health care
Children
living in big cities have the opportunity to learn more about a variety of cultures and backgrounds. Use synonyms
For example
, they can attend musical concerts and cultural events on weekends. Linking Words
In contrast
, Linking Words
children
living in the countryside have fewer cultural experiences. Use synonyms
Children
in the countryside rarely visit museumsUse synonyms
,
or interact with different types of people.
in conclusion, Remove the comma
apply
Linking Words
while
the benefits of Correct word choice
apply
Use synonyms
city
Add an article
the city
center
are Change the spelling
centre
more
stronger than rural Change the word
apply
areas
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
children
Use synonyms
also
should visit sometimes places in Linking Words
Use synonyms
city
Correct article usage
the city
centerf
Correct your spelling
centre
centres
or
their Correct your spelling
for
benefits
.Fix the agreement mistake
benefit
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task response
Make sure to address both views and provide a clear opinion in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and appropriate words.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structures. Use a variety of complex sentences.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.