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Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will no longer be necessary because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #museums #art #galleries #objects #works #computer
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 the contemporary era, people can
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easily
 get a lot of information about
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various
 things through their computers
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 on their chairs, One of these things
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 historical objects that are usually seen at museums or art galleries. Some claim that we don't need
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 visit them by ourselves since we have the virtual alternative. I disagree with
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statement
, I will elaborate on my perspective in the next paragraphs. Visiting
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public
 museums may be
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intresting
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interesting
 and unique journey,
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you can watch special things that you do not see everywhere. Even though we can see the same items
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 our computers by searching the net, being there by ourselves is totally different. The experience of watching
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 closely and sometimes touching them when
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possible makes the option of being there very special.
On the other hand
, not everybody is able to reach every place around the world in order to visit different
galeries
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galleries
 which may be far and
expernsive
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expensive
 at the same time. So the option of seeing historical objects and art's
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artwork
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 may be available via the web without any need to travel or pay
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money for the visit.
To conclude
, I think that arriving
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 galleries and seeing
histoical
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historical
 items there is much more
excsiting
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exciting
 than simply seeing pictures or even doing a virtual around. But at the same time,
this
 would be a not bad option for people who are not able to reach physically to these places.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
  • immersion
  • local tourism
  • economy
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