The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives

Nowadays the most important target of science should be
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human life.
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several reasons
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I think like that.
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, science occupies a huge place in society and it makes our
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easier than ever. If we need to expand
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, thanks to our phones we can communicate easily with our loved persons
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with
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of miles from all over the world with one click.
Besides
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communication on the Internet, it
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maintains a strong healthcare system for our lives. As an example, it contributes to
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a
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new diseases which are unknown or
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a drugs
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, vaccines and more. With the help of
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most of the people are being treated and getting better and better. To summarize, science is
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part of our life and so
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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