Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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their views regarding the destination of professional dedication, whether it should be given to

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where they pursue study or granted freedom to work in any

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as they wish. Apparently, I believe that the view which requires professionals to work in the region of their training place is mainly associated with the significant amount of tuition fee though the opposite opinion is driven by the rights of the workers. Generally,

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as doctors and engineers pursued the high quality of education provided by

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where they went to study, which

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, required them to make professional contributions to that nation.

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, postgraduate students are granted scholarships tied with a contract to work in the hosted

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for one to two years afterwards their graduation.

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evidence supports the high-priced training fee as the main consideration to demand the skilled workers to give back to particular provincial that previously provided them education.

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have the right of freedom to choose any workplace regardless of where they pursue their education.

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, a high-skilled engineer in Japan would be more beneficial if he worked in emerging countries rather than in his home region where he was being trained.

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typical engineer or any similar professional has the right to

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a significant contribution. All in all, the

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for different views that appear regarding the appropriate

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of works by the professionals are worth considering.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
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Finally
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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