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Write a letter to someone to invite them along with you. In the letter: – Explain what has happened and that you would like them to come – Give details of when the trip will take place – Inform the person of the things they will need for the trip

#someone #trip #place #person
Dear Sam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am really excited to tell
about
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you about
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Toronto
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the Toronto
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 wonderland trip my family has planned in
coming
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the coming
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 month. I would like you to join us too. We are planning it for two days
as
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23rd and 24th December. On the first day of our trip, we will visit wonderful and the following day CN tower. It is snowing here in Toronto, so please bring the clothes
accordingly
. I can't wait to see you and have fun with
after
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you after
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this
 long time. Best regards Iman
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task response
Ensure you have fully addressed the task by providing all the necessary information as mentioned in the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by organizing your thoughts more effectively.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary by using a wider range of words and expressions.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure accurate and error-free writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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