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Today, many people fo not know their neighbors in large cities. What problem can this cause? What solution can be done

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 in metropolises around the world is said to be worsening.
This
 problem is attributed to job schedules and the rapid spread of social networks, yet it can be solved by community organizing to create more connections in local lives. It must be acknowledged that the main root of the problem is the heavy workload. Because life develops,
people
's needs in all aspects are enhanced leading to them having to
work
 harder to be able to respond.
As a result
, residents often tend to
work
 overtime or use time at home to do extra
work
.
Although
this
 helps create more social
relationships
, it distances neighbours from each other. Take Tokyo cities as an example,
people
 here do not communicate well with their local
people
 even though they have many other good
relationships
 in society because they go to
work
 more than they do at home. Another factor may be the popularity of social networks.
In other words
, today
people
 are keen on interacting online, which means a lack of face-to-face communication with others, especially their neighbours.
Consequently
,
people
 focus on
relationships
 on social media
as well as
 finding pleasure in them, which means they do not pay attention to the
people
 around them.
However
, a solution can be found in the actions of the community there. The most effective approach is for
people
 in
this
 society to organize group meetings, exchange with each other
along with
 practising communication with each other through the sharing of
work
 and life.
This
 action leads to cohesion and understanding, preventing possible risks when alone. In Vietnam, year-end gatherings or inviting each other to celebrate are often held to increase cohesion. In conclusion, the distance between neighbours in big cities is
due to
 the large workload
coupled with
people
's preference for using social media.
Therefore
, it can be solved by operating exchanges or parties to develop the
relationships
.

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