The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city

The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city
This
chart illustrates the percentage of interesting things about
London
by its people's thoughts. It is divided into 6 sectors, which are the range of shops, job opportunities, the mixture of community, museum and art galleries,
nightlife
, and transport from a 3-year
survey
.
Overall
, most society thought that the range of shops was the most attractive thing in
London
. In the first-year
survey
, it shows that the less interesting scope from
London
is museums and galleries which got 22%. Next, the second-year
survey
shows
nightlife
and transport as the most uninteresting sectors in
London
which were chosen by 20% of people.
Last
, the third-year
survey
, depicted the lowest value was
nightlife
which got only 22%. If it's looked from the average value the first place of the interesting factor was taken by the range of shops, which was followed by job opportunities, a mixture of people, museums & art galleries, and the
last
place is
nightlife
and transport which their average value is 23%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, nightlife, survey with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • results
  • conducted
  • three-year period
  • discover
  • thought
  • city
  • overall satisfaction
  • opinions
  • safety and security
  • transportation
  • perceptions
  • cleanliness
  • cultural and recreational activities
  • attitudes
  • cost of living
  • feedback
  • healthcare services
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