Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, some governments try to escalate the number of their achievements in the
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sphere by building up international
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centres
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for top
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,
while
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society argues about that idea as it wants to have more multisport
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centres
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. In my essay, I talk about each part of the benefits of investing in the government in each sphere. It is an indisputable fact that players will perform better under the guidance of a qualified coach in a convenient environment.
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the Forbes research about the new "Christall
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Hall" for
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at Paris City College, the data showed a significant increase as the
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felt much more free and motivated to achieve new goals for building their future careers.
As a result
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of the international championship, the
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who graduated from
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college won four gold and two silver medals, which was a boost for that young athlete's future career and for the Parisian economy.
On the other hand
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, the government should fund more local
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centres
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to maintain a healthy vibe among the citizens. By opening new gyms, boxing, or gymnastics courses for kids the government opens the opportunity for its citizens to find new hobbies.
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, if some individual who was not planning to become an athlete one day suddenly changes his mind because he finds himself keen on
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.
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, that individual could end up as a brilliant athlete and make his country famous
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his achievements.
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, exercise makes individuals fitter and healthier.
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implies that global health statistics for the typical person would rise.
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, the nation's reputation for excellent health would grow. In conclusion, I think that both local and international
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centres
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bring a lot of benefits to different spheres of a country's life. International
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boost the economy and business,
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their citizens' health would be improved by local convenient fitness
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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